Many professionals from India appear for IELTS – General Training each year in order to apply for permanent residency in Canada and Australia. One of the main challenges these professional face is IELTS writing section which consists of two tasks. Task 1 is Letter Writing and Task 2 is Essay Writing. We have already published few samples of writing task 2.
The task of essay writing expects you to write an essay in minimum 250 words. Reader judges your essay on factors such as Task Response, Coherence and Cohesion, Lexical Resources, and Grammatical Range and Accuracy. Here, we have decided to publish samples by our students which can guide students preparing for IELTS online.
In some countries, it is usual for young people who graduate from high school to spend a year working or travelling before going to university.
What are the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this?
Advantages: get life’s calling; responsible
Disadvantage: distraction; injuries
Students taking a break before joining universities and working or travelling in this break is a widespread practice in the western world. Recently, even Indian parents have started encouraging their children to follow the same practice. While there are advantages of the trend, one may face few hindrances.
Let’s begin with advantages. By working or travelling before joining the universities students can work in the fields of their interests or visit places or people who are already in those fields, thereby gaining more knowledge about their life calling. One of my friends worked as salesman, content writer and even as secretary to a manager before finalising content writing related course in university. Moreover, these experiences of working and travelling force a person to manage their own time, money and safety. Students become more organised and responsible as they are not assisted by parents.
On the other hand, we cannot turn away from possible disadvantages. Firstly, students who take a break and start working may find it difficult to maintain their distance from monetary benefits leading to conflict between academic priorities and work related responsibilities. Even people who have travelled may find difficult to focus back on studies. Secondly, working or travelling at a young age may make students exposed to accidents or health issues. One of my batchmates met an accident which did not allow him to pursue a career in the military.
In summary, students can find out their life’s calling by deciding to work or travel. They may acquire better lifestyle as well. However, they may invite loss of interests in studies as well as physical accidents which may prove dangerous for the career.
Hindrances: obstacles, problems
Monetary: related to money
This essay deserves score between 7.5 to 8
The essay satisfies the task of enlisting advantages and disadvantages very well. It also ensures strong reasoning with corresponding examples.
Coherence and Cohesion:
The essay maintains the flow of ideas quite well by ensuring logical order. Effective usage of linking words helps to transmit well from one topic to another, though there is hiccup while giving examples.
The range of words used is very precise without compromising the meaning of the sentences. There are exactly 271 words which help the writer maintain precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy:
There is enough variety on range of structures which are used appropriately.
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