IELTS ESSAY 20

Many professionals from India appear for IELTS – General Training each year in order to apply for permanent residency in Canada and Australia. One of the main challenges these professional face is IELTS writing section which consists of two tasks. Task 1 is Letter Writing and Task 2 is Essay Writing. We have already published few samples of writing task 2.

The task of essay writing expects you to write an essay in minimum 250 words. Reader judges your essay on factors such as Task Response, Coherence and Cohesion, Lexical Resources, and Grammatical Range and Accuracy. Here, we have decided to publish samples by our students which can guide students preparing for IELTS online.

In many countries, today insufficient respect is shown to older people.

What do you think may be the reasons for this?

What problems might this cause in society?

Answer:

In this fast-paced world, local traditions are first causalities of globalization. While people are busy celebrating the materialistic achievements, very few are concerned about the old generation, forget acknowledging their parent’s due contribution in the success. This is an attempt to account for the reasons of the trends and their repercussions in the future.

Let’s begin with causes of the trend. Due to change in priorities youngsters value their careers to the extent of sacrificing their family time. Lack of attention makes veterans feel unwanted. To reconcile the relations, they may ask off-springs few questions which are labelled by the youth as an intrusion in their lives, leading to disrespect. Moreover, rarely do we see senior members fit enough to care for themselves. Their physical, as well as monetary dependence, is abhorred, leading to further disregard. For example, many youngsters leave their countries, never to return to their parents and family lest they may depend on youth’s new-found treasure.

If this continues further, one can foresee a bleak future for the humanity. Firstly, lack of respect for the seniors of a house leads to dysfunctional families as youngsters opt for nuclear families at drop of a hat. Secondly, parents who are technologically and monetarily dependent on their children are considered as a liability and dispatched to old-age homes which have sprung up like mushrooms all over the country. The trends estrange the families jolting the foundations of family systems.

Looking back, it clear that changes in priorities and moral grounds of the current generation are main reasons for such an apathy towards elderly. If this continues to happen they institution of families itself will be challenged in the future.

Score:

This essay deserves a score of about 8.

Task Response:

The essay satisfies the task of explaining the causes and effects very well. It also ensures strong reasoning with corresponding examples.

Coherence and Cohesion:

The essay maintains the flow of ideas quite well by ensuring logical order. Effective usage of linking words helps to transmit well from one topic to another, though there is hiccup while giving examples.

Lexical Resource:

The range of words used is very precise without compromising the meaning of the sentences. There are exactly 278 words which help the writer maintain precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy:

There is enough range of structures which are used appropriately.

Did you like this post? We have helped more than 1000 students last year in Pune to prepare for IELTS. You can enquire about us below.

 

IELTS ESSAY 19

Many professionals from India appear for IELTS – General Training each year in order to apply for permanent residency in Canada and Australia. One of the main challenges these professional face is IELTS writing section which consists of two tasks. Task 1 is Letter Writing and Task 2 is Essay Writing. We have already published few samples of writing task 2.

Task of essay writing expects you to write an essay in minimum 250 words. Reader judges your essay on factors such as Task Response, Coherence and Cohesion, Lexical Resources, and Grammatical Range and Accuracy. Here, we have decided to publish samples by our students which can guide students preparing for IELTS online.

Advances in technology and automation have reduced the need for manual labour. (opinion) Therefore, working hours should be reduced.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Automation is pervasive across all industries and has reduced human efforts. At the same time, it has given birth to many phenomena ranging from industrialization to globalization, keeping people discussing whether to decrease the number of working hours or not. It seems that the number of working hours must be kept similar.

Let’s consider manufacturing industry. Indeed, the automation has reduced the human labours drastically but also has reduced number of labourers instead of working hours. At the same time, the globalization and revolution in transportation have increased the consumer demands of goods many-folds. To manufacture for such soaring demands, the fired workers work in other industries which help bridge the gap between demand and supply, in turn, creating new jobs. These task forces put in 24 hours a day which in fact demands more number of working hours.

On the other hand, one can argue that in Information Technology (IT) sector, automated programs assist the personnel by reducing number of hours required to complete the tasks. Additionally, better hardware makes it easy to have sophisticated programs which can reduce the need to work extensively. However, increasing productivity standards demand constant improvement in such codes and hardware. Improving these both aspects requires additional working hours ultimately beating the goal why they were there in first place.

Looking back, in traditional industries like manufacturing as well as non-traditional industries like IT, increasing demands of customers, productivity standards, and subsequent improvisations make it difficult to even maintain same number of working hours forget reducing them. So, I believe the number of working hours should be constant.

Score:

This essay deserves a score of about 7.5.

Task Response:

The essay satisfies the task of explaining both sides of the essay very well. It also ensures strong reasoning with corresponding examples.

Coherence and Cohesion:

The essay maintains the flow of ideas quite well by ensuring logical order. Effective usage of linking words helps to transmit well from one topic to another, though there is hiccup while giving examples.

Lexical Resource:

The range of words used is very precise without compromising the meaning of the sentences. There are exactly 268 words which help the writer maintain precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy:

There is enough range of structures which are used appropriately.

Did you like this post? We have helped more than 1000 students last year in Pune to prepare for IELTS. You can enquire about us below.

IELTS ESSAY 18

Many professionals from India appear for IELTS – General Training each year in order to apply for permanent residency in Canada and Australia. One of the main challenges these professional face is IELTS writing section which consists of two tasks. Task 1 is Letter Writing and Task 2 is Essay Writing. We have already published few samples of writing task 2.

The task of essay writing expects you to write an essay in minimum 250 words. Reader judges your essay on factors such as Task Response, Coherence and Cohesion, Lexical Resources, and Grammatical Range and Accuracy. Here, we have decided to publish samples by our students which can guide students preparing for IELTS online.

While mobile phones have many advantages, a number of problems have also resulted from them or the ways in which they are used.
What are some of these problems?
What solutions can you suggest for solving these problems?

In this ever-evolving world, communication has been revolutionized thanks to mobile phones. Agreed the changes have brought the world closer, but have opened a new can of worms which, in fact, is difficult to manage. Looking at the intensity of new found problems, it is high time to take remedial actions.

Cellular phones have sucked emotions out of the relations as most of the communication is handled through these small devices, eliminating the need to talk face to face. Friends who used to knock on the doors earlier have started updating over phones, creating emotional gaps. Further, excessive usage of the device exposes the user to harmful radiations, which affect the vital organs in the body. A Recent surge in the rate of heart attacks in employees using mobiles is a warning for all of us.

To overcome such terrible consequences, one must minimize using the mobile phones and keep it for emergency measures. It can be agreed that the versatility of the device compels the user to be around it, however, avoiding social scenarios and compromising emotional values in the relationship cannot be justified. One can optimize the usage by allocating certain periods of time. Also, this way the user can ensure that radiations are affecting the body in limited ways: headphones on calls can be extremely beneficial to keep away from the effect of radiations.

Looking back, unwarranted usage of the mobile phones has led advent of unforeseen complications which have social as well as physical implications. To avoid such glitches, one must restrict usage as much as possible while devising few precautionary methods in unavoidable circumstance.

Score:

This essay deserves score of 8 or more.

Task Response:

The essay satisfies the task of enlisting problems and their solutions very well. It also ensures strong reasoning with corresponding examples.

Coherence and Cohesion:

The essay maintains the flow of ideas quite well by ensuring logical order. Effective usage of linking words helps to transmit well from one topic to another, though there is hiccup while giving examples.

Lexical Resource:

The range of words used is very precise without compromising the meaning of the sentences. There are exactly 268 words which help the writer maintain precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy:

There is enough range of structures which are used appropriately.

Did you like this post? We have helped more than 1000 students last year in Pune to prepare for IELTS. You can enquire about us below.

IELTS Writing Task 1 | General Training | Sample 3

Many professionals from India appear for IELTS – General Training each year in order to apply for permanent residency in Canada and Australia. One of the main challenges these professional face is IELTS writing section which consists of two tasks. Task 1 is Letter Writing and Task 2 is Essay Writing. We have already published few samples of writing task 1.

The task of letter writing expects you to write a letter in minimum 150 words. Reader judges your letter on factors such as Task Achievement, Coherence and Cohesion, Lexical Resources, and Grammatical Range and Accuracy. Here, we have decided to publish samples by our students which can guide students preparing for IELTS online.

There is a problem on a road outside your home.

Write a letter to your local councillor. In your letter

  • Introduce yourself
  • Explain what the problem is
  • tell the councillor what you would like to be done

Answer:

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am Dipankar Banerjee from Ward No. 57 residing in Lane No. 5, Prabhat Road. I am writing this letter to draw your kind attention to the inconveniences caused by potholes on the road in our locality.

Since last election season, nobody has bothered to maintain the road and as result, the tar road, which is busy day and night and has sustained heavy monsoons, has worn off to give way to big potholes. These potholes on busy road results in a traffic jam. School children find it difficult to cross the road while office-goers need to leave homes early lest they miss office. Senior citizens cannot walk on the footpath as impatient bikers hop onto it in evenings.

As a concerned citizen, I urge you to tackle this problem on war-footing and repair the road as early as possible. I am sure my neighbours won’t mind a closed road for a week than suffer a perpetual problem.

In the context, may I request you to consider the matter out of your busy schedule? I am eagerly waiting for your response. Thanks for your attention to the letter.

Yours faithfully,

Dipankar Banerjee

Did you like this post? We have helped more than 1000 students last year in Pune to prepare for IELTS. You can enquire about us below.

 What’s in the IELTS Writing paper?

Writing section on IELTS is the last one after Listening and Reading sections respectively. There are two Writing tasks and BOTH must be attempted to get the final score in the writing section. The writing Task 1 may vary based on the module of the IELTS: Academic or General Training

Task 1 (Academic)

You must describe some visual information (a graph, table, chart or diagram) in your own words. You need to write minimum 150 words in about 20 minutes. Depending on the task type, you will be assessed on your ability to:

  • organise, present and possibly compare data
  • describe stages of a process or procedure
  • describe an object, event or sequence of events
  • explain how something works.

Task 1 (General Training)

You should respond to a situation by writing a letter, for example, asking for information or explaining a situation. You need to write at least 150 words in about 20 minutes. You might need to ask for or give information and/or explain a situation. The situations you need to write about are common, everyday situations such as:

  • writing to a hostel rector about problems with your accommodation
  • writing to a new employer about problems you are having with managing your time
  • writing to a local newspaper about a plan to develop a local airport
  • writing to a renting agency to sort out problems with the heating system in your house.

Task 2 (Both Academic and General Training)

You are given a point of view, argument or problem which you need to debate. You need to write at least 250 words in about 40 minutes.

In Writing Task 2, you are given a topic to write about. Your answer should discuss the most appropriate issues. You must read the task carefully so that you can write a full answer that is relevant. For example, if the topic is an aspect of the wider topic of internet, you should focus on this aspect only in your answer. You should not simply write about internet in general.

You should write in an academic or semi-formal/neutral style. You will need to organise your ideas clearly and make sure you use relevant examples (which can be from your own experience, if relevant) or evidence.

Depending on the task type, you will be evaluated on your skill to:

  • present a solution to a problem
  • present and justify an opinion
  • compare opinions
  • evaluate and challenge ideas, evidence or an argument.

How am I allotted Marks?

Certificated IELTS examiners evaluate your performance on each Writing task. There are four evaluation criteria that examiner uses to allot credits to your attempt:

  1. Task achievement/response
  2. Coherence and cohesion
  3. Lexical resource
  4. Grammatical range and accuracy.

Task achievement (in Task 1) and Task response (in Task 2)

It assesses how precisely, appropriately and relevantly your response covers the task requirements, using the minimum of 150 words for Task 1 and 250 words for Task 2.

In Task 1, all the information you require is given in the diagram.

In Task 2, Task response includes how well you develop your argument in response to the task, presenting examples which may be from your own experience.

Coherence and cohesion

It measures how clear and fluent your writing is, and how you organise ideas and information. It includes giving your ideas in a logical order and using a range of cohesive devices (for example, linking words, pronouns and conjunctions, etc.) appropriately.

Lexical resource

It weighs the range of vocabulary you have used, and how accurately and appropriately you use it.

Grammatical range and accuracy

It judges the range of grammar you have used and how accurately and appropriately you have used it.

You must remember that you will be penalised if

  • you write irrelevant.
  • your answer is not written as a whole piece of connected text (i.e. you must not use notes or bullet points).
  • your writing is copied.
  • your answer is too short.

Did you like this post? We have helped more than 1000 students last year in Pune to prepare for IELTS. You can enquire about us below.

IELTS ESSAY 17

Many professionals from India appear for IELTS – General Training each year in order to apply for permanent residency in Canada and Australia. One of the main challenges these professional face is IELTS writing section which consists of two tasks. Task 1 is Letter Writing and Task 2 is Essay Writing. We have already published few samples of writing task 2.

The task of essay writing expects you to write an essay in minimum 250 words. Reader judges your essay on factors such as Task Response, Coherence and Cohesion, Lexical Resources, and Grammatical Range and Accuracy. Here, we have decided to publish samples by our students which can guide students preparing for IELTS online.

In some countries, it is usual for young people who graduate from high school to spend a year working or travelling before going to university.

What are the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this?

Advantages: get life’s calling; responsible

Disadvantage: distraction; injuries

Students taking a break before joining universities and working or travelling in this break is a widespread practice in the western world. Recently, even Indian parents have started encouraging their children to follow the same practice. While there are advantages of the trend, one may face few hindrances.

Let’s begin with advantages. By working or travelling before joining the universities students can work in the fields of their interests or visit places or people who are already in those fields, thereby gaining more knowledge about their life calling. One of my friends worked as salesman, content writer and even as secretary to a manager before finalising content writing related course in university. Moreover, these experiences of working and travelling force a person to manage their own time, money and safety. Students become more organised and responsible as they are not assisted by parents.

On the other hand, we cannot turn away from possible disadvantages. Firstly, students who take a break and start working may find it difficult to maintain their distance from monetary benefits leading to conflict between academic priorities and work related responsibilities. Even people who have travelled may find difficult to focus back on studies. Secondly, working or travelling at a young age may make students exposed to accidents or health issues. One of my batchmates met an accident which did not allow him to pursue a career in the military.

In summary, students can find out their life’s calling by deciding to work or travel. They may acquire better lifestyle as well. However, they may invite loss of interests in studies as well as physical accidents which may prove dangerous for the career.

Vocabulary:

Hindrances: obstacles, problems

Monetary: related to money

Conflict: fight

Score:

This essay deserves score between 7.5 to 8

Task Response:

The essay satisfies the task of enlisting advantages and disadvantages very well. It also ensures strong reasoning with corresponding examples.

Coherence and Cohesion:

The essay maintains the flow of ideas quite well by ensuring logical order. Effective usage of linking words helps to transmit well from one topic to another, though there is hiccup while giving examples.

Lexical Resource:

The range of words used is very precise without compromising the meaning of the sentences. There are exactly 271 words which help the writer maintain precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy:

There is enough variety on range of structures which are used appropriately.

Did you like this post? We have helped more than 1000 students last year in Pune to prepare for IELTS. You can enquire about us below.

IELTS Writing Task 1 | General Training | Sample 2

Many professionals from India appear for IELTS – General Training each year in order to apply for permanent residency in Canada and Australia. One of the main challenges these professional face is IELTS writing section which consists of two tasks. Task 1 is Letter Writing and Task 2 is Essay Writing. We have already published few samples of writing task 2.

The task of letter writing expects you to write a letter in minimum 150 words. Reader judges your letter on factors such as Task Achievement, Coherence and Cohesion, Lexical Resources, and Grammatical Range and Accuracy. Here, we have decided to publish samples by our students which can guide students preparing for IELTS online.

You and some friends ate a meal at a restaurant to celebrate a special occasion, and you were very pleased with the food and service.

Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter

  • Give details of your visit to the restaurant
  • Explain the reason for the celebration
  • Say what was good about the food and the service

Answer:

Dear Sir,

I am Ankit Singh, who visited your restaurant last weekend. I am writing this letter to extend my gratitude for being a generous host on Saturday evening.

We were a party of 6 classmates who had not met for last 10 years but somehow bumped into each other that afternoon. Since we could not book a table at the last moment, I thought of visiting your place, a decision I am proud of.

As you might have guessed, we were revelling a pleasantly surprising reunion of the friends after a long time.

For such a gathering, we found your place to be perfect. When we entered the restaurant, the helping staff greeted us with a welcome-drink and after listening to our story offered a poolside table. Mr. Singh was a perfect host who could suggest a perfect menu for each of us based on preferences. I must also appreciate the efforts your band puts in creating a tranquil yet positive mood.

We all thank you for the evening.  Looking forward to an excuse to visit the restaurant again.

Yours faithfully,

Ankit Singh

The student who wrote the sample received a score of 8 on his actual IELTS writing section.

Did you like this post? We have helped more than 1000 students last year in Pune to prepare for IELTS. You can enquire about us below.

IELTS Essay 13

 

Developed nations must help under-developed or developing countries.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Write valid reasons and relevant examples to support your position using at least 250 words.

Answer:

In today’s world, there are many countries which are either developing or underdeveloped. They lack in important standards of living like health, education, and trade. Due to many social, economic and other kinds of reasons, they are not capable of achieving this progress on their own. Therefore, I certainly think that it is essential to get this assistance from governments of developed nations.

If developed nations take responsibility to help poorer nations, it will bring balance to the overall progress of the entire world and our planet will become a better place to live. Firstly, aids for arranging health campaigns and training camps on advanced medicine for doctors from poor countries can help us elevate the levels of healthcare in such countries. Secondly, education systems in poorer countries can be improved by training students and teachers in developed countries and providing them with better facilities. Thirdly, trade can also be increased by increasing collaboration between developed and poor countries where some hidden traditional novelties can find a niche in the world market. For many years the science in Ayurveda was untapped in Western World; now these techniques have come in quite handy in paramedicine.

On the other hand, there are few who opine that developed countries are under no obligation to help the developing ones. Yet they conveniently ignore the fact that cooperation among developed countries have helped them reach those milestones. Collaboration is essential and if such a helping hand is extended towards the underdeveloped states, they may help the developed nations back in future as we all know life is a circle.

In the end, the act of benevolence from rich countries won’t harm them rather would help restore miserable lives who are struggling for basic necessities. I would like to emphasize that the governments of rich nations must assist poorer nations.

This student received 8 on the actual writing test.

Did you like this post? We have helped more than 1000 students last year in Pune to prepare for IELTS. You can enquire about our courses below.

IELTS Essay 12

Many professionals from India appear for IELTS – General Training each year in order to apply for permanent residency in Canada and Australia. Students appear for Academic module. Task 1 is Letter Writing and Task 2 is Essay Writing.

Essay writing expects you to write a letter in minimum 250 words. Reader judges your essay on factors such as Task Response, Coherence and Cohesion, Lexical Resources, and Grammatical Range and Accuracy. Here, we have decided to publish samples by our students which can guide students preparing for IELTS online.

In some countries, children have very strict rules of behavior, in other countries they are allowed to do almost anything they want. To what extent should children have to follow rules?

Write at least 250 words.

Include valid reasons and relevant examples from your knowledge and experience to back your position.

Answer:

Children are the future of the society. Well nurtured and well-behaved children turn into useful adults who ultimately contribute to a healthy community. Now, some countries set very strict rules for children while others provide unnecessary flexibility. In my opinion, children’s upbringing must be balanced which means they must be encouraged to see dreams and chase them along while respecting the rules of loving elders.

To begin, if children are grown in very strict environment, curiosity for the restricted aspects of life rises. This may deviate them from their goals and prompt them to take extreme measures acting on impulse. It is no coincidence that most of the people find and taste alcohol in teenage along with their friends.

Similarly, if children are never questioned and they are allowed to behave as per whim they may get exposed to disturbing information for their age. This may lead them to take wrong actions as their conscience is not developed. For illustration, teenage pregnancy is one of the tormenting experiences on the rise nowadays as the liberal youth is enlightened only in bits and parts.

However, the concerned parents who understand the problems of their children can educate kids to develop sense of right and wrong by providing guidelines rather than rigid rules of behaviour. With such successful attempt children can explore unknown aspects on their own, by scaling every aspect on the guiding principle given by their parents.

In the end, extremes of freedom as well as restrictions turn out to be destructive for our future generations as they may either rebel against the society or they may never develop the conscience. Rather, a balanced approach where the young generation acts freely based on guidelines laid by elders is advocated.

The student received 8 bands in her actual IELTS examination.

Did you like this post? We have helped more than 1000 students last year in Pune to prepare for IELTS. You can enquire about our courses below.