IELTS ESSAY 18

Many professionals from India appear for IELTS – General Training each year in order to apply for permanent residency in Canada and Australia. One of the main challenges these professional face is IELTS writing section which consists of two tasks. Task 1 is Letter Writing and Task 2 is Essay Writing. We have already published few samples of writing task 2.

The task of essay writing expects you to write an essay in minimum 250 words. Reader judges your essay on factors such as Task Response, Coherence and Cohesion, Lexical Resources, and Grammatical Range and Accuracy. Here, we have decided to publish samples by our students which can guide students preparing for IELTS online.

While mobile phones have many advantages, a number of problems have also resulted from them or the ways in which they are used.
What are some of these problems?
What solutions can you suggest for solving these problems?

In this ever-evolving world, communication has been revolutionized thanks to mobile phones. Agreed the changes have brought the world closer, but have opened a new can of worms which, in fact, is difficult to manage. Looking at the intensity of new found problems, it is high time to take remedial actions.

Cellular phones have sucked emotions out of the relations as most of the communication is handled through these small devices, eliminating the need to talk face to face. Friends who used to knock on the doors earlier have started updating over phones, creating emotional gaps. Further, excessive usage of the device exposes the user to harmful radiations, which affect the vital organs in the body. A Recent surge in the rate of heart attacks in employees using mobiles is a warning for all of us.

To overcome such terrible consequences, one must minimize using the mobile phones and keep it for emergency measures. It can be agreed that the versatility of the device compels the user to be around it, however, avoiding social scenarios and compromising emotional values in the relationship cannot be justified. One can optimize the usage by allocating certain periods of time. Also, this way the user can ensure that radiations are affecting the body in limited ways: headphones on calls can be extremely beneficial to keep away from the effect of radiations.

Looking back, unwarranted usage of the mobile phones has led advent of unforeseen complications which have social as well as physical implications. To avoid such glitches, one must restrict usage as much as possible while devising few precautionary methods in unavoidable circumstance.

Score:

This essay deserves score of 8 or more.

Task Response:

The essay satisfies the task of enlisting problems and their solutions very well. It also ensures strong reasoning with corresponding examples.

Coherence and Cohesion:

The essay maintains the flow of ideas quite well by ensuring logical order. Effective usage of linking words helps to transmit well from one topic to another, though there is hiccup while giving examples.

Lexical Resource:

The range of words used is very precise without compromising the meaning of the sentences. There are exactly 268 words which help the writer maintain precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy:

There is enough range of structures which are used appropriately.

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IELTS Writing Task 1 | General Training | Sample 4

Many professionals from India appear for IELTS – General Training each year in order to apply for permanent residency in Canada and Australia. One of the main challenges these professional face is IELTS writing section which consists of two tasks. Task 1 is Letter Writing and Task 2 is Essay Writing. We have already published few samples of writing task 1.

The task of letter writing expects you to write a letter in minimum 150 words. Reader judges your letter on factors such as Task Achievement, Coherence and Cohesion, Lexical Resources, and Grammatical Range and Accuracy. Here, we have decided to publish samples by our students which can guide students preparing for IELTS online.

You recently went on a trip with your friend and you both took some photographs.

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

  • Ask your friend to send you one of the photographs
  • Explain why you need that particular photograph
  • And tell your friend what happened to your copy of it

Dear Sameer,

I hope you find this letter in good health. I still remember the last trip we had, last May to the jungles of Gir with our families.

En route we clicked numerous photographs of wild, but one of them which was the highlight of the endeavor was that of 10 lions together in the wee hours of the morning. Lions in India are rarefied and so, the photograph you clicked is a rare gem. I would be very happy to receive a raw copy of it.

I think this click will suit my son, Rohan’s latest science project on wildlife for the tenth standard.  Firstly, the photograph captures the beast in its full glory and secondly, the original work rather than just plagiarism work will elevate the quality of his project.

I still have a copy of it on my WhatssApp however, it is far from impressive to print it in the project. Moreover, the hardcopy shared with Rohan was misplaced in his school-bus. Even after multiple searches in school, the bus and at home we could not recover it.

I hope you find some time from your busy schedule to dispatch the raw copy as already mentioned. Call me if needed. See you on Suresh’s housewarming party in next week.

Thank you in advance.

Warm regards,

Ashish

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IELTS Writing Task 1 | General Training | Sample 3

Many professionals from India appear for IELTS – General Training each year in order to apply for permanent residency in Canada and Australia. One of the main challenges these professional face is IELTS writing section which consists of two tasks. Task 1 is Letter Writing and Task 2 is Essay Writing. We have already published few samples of writing task 1.

The task of letter writing expects you to write a letter in minimum 150 words. Reader judges your letter on factors such as Task Achievement, Coherence and Cohesion, Lexical Resources, and Grammatical Range and Accuracy. Here, we have decided to publish samples by our students which can guide students preparing for IELTS online.

There is a problem on a road outside your home.

Write a letter to your local councillor. In your letter

  • Introduce yourself
  • Explain what the problem is
  • tell the councillor what you would like to be done

Answer:

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am Dipankar Banerjee from Ward No. 57 residing in Lane No. 5, Prabhat Road. I am writing this letter to draw your kind attention to the inconveniences caused by potholes on the road in our locality.

Since last election season, nobody has bothered to maintain the road and as result, the tar road, which is busy day and night and has sustained heavy monsoons, has worn off to give way to big potholes. These potholes on busy road results in a traffic jam. School children find it difficult to cross the road while office-goers need to leave homes early lest they miss office. Senior citizens cannot walk on the footpath as impatient bikers hop onto it in evenings.

As a concerned citizen, I urge you to tackle this problem on war-footing and repair the road as early as possible. I am sure my neighbours won’t mind a closed road for a week than suffer a perpetual problem.

In the context, may I request you to consider the matter out of your busy schedule? I am eagerly waiting for your response. Thanks for your attention to the letter.

Yours faithfully,

Dipankar Banerjee

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 What’s in the IELTS Writing paper?

Writing section on IELTS is the last one after Listening and Reading sections respectively. There are two Writing tasks and BOTH must be attempted to get the final score in the writing section. The writing Task 1 may vary based on the module of the IELTS: Academic or General Training

Task 1 (Academic)

You must describe some visual information (a graph, table, chart or diagram) in your own words. You need to write minimum 150 words in about 20 minutes. Depending on the task type, you will be assessed on your ability to:

  • organise, present and possibly compare data
  • describe stages of a process or procedure
  • describe an object, event or sequence of events
  • explain how something works.

Task 1 (General Training)

You should respond to a situation by writing a letter, for example, asking for information or explaining a situation. You need to write at least 150 words in about 20 minutes. You might need to ask for or give information and/or explain a situation. The situations you need to write about are common, everyday situations such as:

  • writing to a hostel rector about problems with your accommodation
  • writing to a new employer about problems you are having with managing your time
  • writing to a local newspaper about a plan to develop a local airport
  • writing to a renting agency to sort out problems with the heating system in your house.

Task 2 (Both Academic and General Training)

You are given a point of view, argument or problem which you need to debate. You need to write at least 250 words in about 40 minutes.

In Writing Task 2, you are given a topic to write about. Your answer should discuss the most appropriate issues. You must read the task carefully so that you can write a full answer that is relevant. For example, if the topic is an aspect of the wider topic of internet, you should focus on this aspect only in your answer. You should not simply write about internet in general.

You should write in an academic or semi-formal/neutral style. You will need to organise your ideas clearly and make sure you use relevant examples (which can be from your own experience, if relevant) or evidence.

Depending on the task type, you will be evaluated on your skill to:

  • present a solution to a problem
  • present and justify an opinion
  • compare opinions
  • evaluate and challenge ideas, evidence or an argument.

How am I allotted Marks?

Certificated IELTS examiners evaluate your performance on each Writing task. There are four evaluation criteria that examiner uses to allot credits to your attempt:

  1. Task achievement/response
  2. Coherence and cohesion
  3. Lexical resource
  4. Grammatical range and accuracy.

Task achievement (in Task 1) and Task response (in Task 2)

It assesses how precisely, appropriately and relevantly your response covers the task requirements, using the minimum of 150 words for Task 1 and 250 words for Task 2.

In Task 1, all the information you require is given in the diagram.

In Task 2, Task response includes how well you develop your argument in response to the task, presenting examples which may be from your own experience.

Coherence and cohesion

It measures how clear and fluent your writing is, and how you organise ideas and information. It includes giving your ideas in a logical order and using a range of cohesive devices (for example, linking words, pronouns and conjunctions, etc.) appropriately.

Lexical resource

It weighs the range of vocabulary you have used, and how accurately and appropriately you use it.

Grammatical range and accuracy

It judges the range of grammar you have used and how accurately and appropriately you have used it.

You must remember that you will be penalised if

  • you write irrelevant.
  • your answer is not written as a whole piece of connected text (i.e. you must not use notes or bullet points).
  • your writing is copied.
  • your answer is too short.

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IELTS ESSAY 17

Many professionals from India appear for IELTS – General Training each year in order to apply for permanent residency in Canada and Australia. One of the main challenges these professional face is IELTS writing section which consists of two tasks. Task 1 is Letter Writing and Task 2 is Essay Writing. We have already published few samples of writing task 2.

The task of essay writing expects you to write an essay in minimum 250 words. Reader judges your essay on factors such as Task Response, Coherence and Cohesion, Lexical Resources, and Grammatical Range and Accuracy. Here, we have decided to publish samples by our students which can guide students preparing for IELTS online.

In some countries, it is usual for young people who graduate from high school to spend a year working or travelling before going to university.

What are the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this?

Advantages: get life’s calling; responsible

Disadvantage: distraction; injuries

Students taking a break before joining universities and working or travelling in this break is a widespread practice in the western world. Recently, even Indian parents have started encouraging their children to follow the same practice. While there are advantages of the trend, one may face few hindrances.

Let’s begin with advantages. By working or travelling before joining the universities students can work in the fields of their interests or visit places or people who are already in those fields, thereby gaining more knowledge about their life calling. One of my friends worked as salesman, content writer and even as secretary to a manager before finalising content writing related course in university. Moreover, these experiences of working and travelling force a person to manage their own time, money and safety. Students become more organised and responsible as they are not assisted by parents.

On the other hand, we cannot turn away from possible disadvantages. Firstly, students who take a break and start working may find it difficult to maintain their distance from monetary benefits leading to conflict between academic priorities and work related responsibilities. Even people who have travelled may find difficult to focus back on studies. Secondly, working or travelling at a young age may make students exposed to accidents or health issues. One of my batchmates met an accident which did not allow him to pursue a career in the military.

In summary, students can find out their life’s calling by deciding to work or travel. They may acquire better lifestyle as well. However, they may invite loss of interests in studies as well as physical accidents which may prove dangerous for the career.

Vocabulary:

Hindrances: obstacles, problems

Monetary: related to money

Conflict: fight

Score:

This essay deserves score between 7.5 to 8

Task Response:

The essay satisfies the task of enlisting advantages and disadvantages very well. It also ensures strong reasoning with corresponding examples.

Coherence and Cohesion:

The essay maintains the flow of ideas quite well by ensuring logical order. Effective usage of linking words helps to transmit well from one topic to another, though there is hiccup while giving examples.

Lexical Resource:

The range of words used is very precise without compromising the meaning of the sentences. There are exactly 271 words which help the writer maintain precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy:

There is enough variety on range of structures which are used appropriately.

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IELTS Writing Task 1 | General Training | Sample 2

Many professionals from India appear for IELTS – General Training each year in order to apply for permanent residency in Canada and Australia. One of the main challenges these professional face is IELTS writing section which consists of two tasks. Task 1 is Letter Writing and Task 2 is Essay Writing. We have already published few samples of writing task 2.

The task of letter writing expects you to write a letter in minimum 150 words. Reader judges your letter on factors such as Task Achievement, Coherence and Cohesion, Lexical Resources, and Grammatical Range and Accuracy. Here, we have decided to publish samples by our students which can guide students preparing for IELTS online.

You and some friends ate a meal at a restaurant to celebrate a special occasion, and you were very pleased with the food and service.

Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter

  • Give details of your visit to the restaurant
  • Explain the reason for the celebration
  • Say what was good about the food and the service

Answer:

Dear Sir,

I am Ankit Singh, who visited your restaurant last weekend. I am writing this letter to extend my gratitude for being a generous host on Saturday evening.

We were a party of 6 classmates who had not met for last 10 years but somehow bumped into each other that afternoon. Since we could not book a table at the last moment, I thought of visiting your place, a decision I am proud of.

As you might have guessed, we were revelling a pleasantly surprising reunion of the friends after a long time.

For such a gathering, we found your place to be perfect. When we entered the restaurant, the helping staff greeted us with a welcome-drink and after listening to our story offered a poolside table. Mr. Singh was a perfect host who could suggest a perfect menu for each of us based on preferences. I must also appreciate the efforts your band puts in creating a tranquil yet positive mood.

We all thank you for the evening.  Looking forward to an excuse to visit the restaurant again.

Yours faithfully,

Ankit Singh

The student who wrote the sample received a score of 8 on his actual IELTS writing section.

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IELTS ESSAY 16

Many professionals from India appear for IELTS – General Training each year in order to apply for permanent residency in Canada and Australia. One of the main challenges these professional face is IELTS writing section which consists of two tasks. Task 1 is Letter Writing and Task 2 is Essay Writing. We have already published few samples of writing task 2.

The task of essay writing expects you to write an essay in minimum 250 words. Reader judges your essay on factors such as Task Response, Coherence and Cohesion, Lexical Resources, and Grammatical Range and Accuracy. Here, we have decided to publish samples by our students which can guide students preparing for IELTS online.

Some people think that having old people in society is a problem as they are completely dependent on their children while others believe that having senior citizen around adds value to the family.

Discuss both these views and give you opinion.

Benefits: Guidance, culture

Problems: dependency

Need to be compassionate about them as they were for you as a child

Owing to the advances in medical fields, average age of humans has transcended prior limits and so we see many elders around. While some may say that it is better to have elder generation around, others feel that they are just a burden. I feel that, having elders around is always a boon.

Elders have immense experience through their share of success and failures which help younger generation through their insights and in fact, can clinch higher peaks of success. While starting my new venture in Information Technology (IT), I consulted my grandfather who used to run a manufacturing company. Although he knew nothing about IT, he provided valuable insights into employee management which came in handy. Moreover, elders are the torchbearers of the culture and share their insights well in major events of life such as marriages.

However, some criticise the role of elders in modern homes. They advocate that seniors meddle into the daily lives of their children and grandchildren. As seniors grow old, they develop this habit of preaching their family and in fact taking their moral down. I would urge such people to look into this problem in some other ways. Probably senile instruct the generation X out of love and their willingness to help. Rather than isolating them, it is the duty of our youth to ensure that seniors are familiar with the technology and are a relevant part of a family.

Looking back it is very clear that elders help their children by through their life experiences and knowledge of cultures and traditions. Although sometimes their instructions may seem like intrusion, we can make them feel part of modern lives. Hence, I can say for sure advantages of having elders around are always more than disadvantages.

Vocabulary

Transcend: surpass, go beyond something

Boon: benefit

Clinch higher peaks of success: achieve higher success

Torchbearers: a leader

To advocate: to support

To preach: to give lecture

Senile: senior members of the society who may seem forgetful

Intrusion: disturbance

Score

This essay deserves score between 7.5 to 8

Task Response:

The essay satisfies the task of finding the causes and consequences very well. It also ensures strong reasoning with corresponding examples.

Coherence and Cohesion:

The essay maintains flow of ideas quite well by ensuring logical order of time. Effective usage of linking words helps to transit well from one topic to another, though there is hiccup in logical flow in the second paragraph while introducing second point.

Lexical Resource:

The range of words used is very precise without compromising meaning of the sentences. There are exactly 292 words which help the writer maintain precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy:

There is enough variety on range of structures used appropriately.

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IELTS ESSAY 15

Many professionals from India appear for IELTS – General Training each year in order to apply for permanent residency in Canada and Australia. One of the main challenges these professional face is IELTS writing section which consists of two tasks. Task 1 is Letter Writing and Task 2 is Essay Writing. We have already published few samples of writing task 2.

The task of essay writing expects you to write an essay in minimum 250 words. Reader judges your essay on factors such as Task Response, Coherence and Cohesion, Lexical Resources, and Grammatical Range and Accuracy. Here, we have decided to publish samples by our students which can guide students preparing for IELTS online.

Housing and accommodation has become a major problem in many countries around the world.

What are some of the main factors that have contributed to this problem?

What can be done to help reduce the number of homeless people?

Brainstorming:

Causes: Migration to cities – better education and job – population explosion – higher demand for houses – higher costs – limited lands – Accommodation problems

Solutions: Decentralisation of opportunities

While travelling in my city Mumbai, it is hard to miss the cramped housing and ever-increasing slums. These issues creep in the cities because of multiple reasons and lead to a lack of basic facilities.  The onus to provide accommodation and basic amenities lies with the government to a great extent.

Even after hundred years of industrialization, people from villages migrate to cities in search of better prospects of education and jobs. This rapid migration surges the demand of housing and property rates. Higher demand for housing leads to a deficiency of the land while higher property rates push people to congested vicinities and hence the problems of housing. To illustrate, Pune, a city in India witnesses people migrating people all over the country as the city has developed to be a manufacturing, IT and educational hub, giving ways to unstructured growth and accommodation woes.

To overcome these obstacles, the government must take some instant steps. Firstly, the government must work on affordable housing schemes for the citizen who have already found the means in the city. Let’s take the case of Japan where the government is promoting ‘cubic feet living’, a concept which utilizes the vertical space. Secondly, it should promote the education as well as entrepreneurship in rural parts thereby reducing the current trend of migration and ultimately controlling the expanding cities.

Looking back, centralization of the industrial area as well as means of education and career are major reasons for migration and thus accommodation despairs in cities. These difficulties can be addressed primarily by decentralization of industry as well career opportunities.

Vocabulary

Cramped: uncomfortably small or restricted

Onus: responsibility

Surge: rapid increase

Vicinities: neighbourhood

Woes: problems

Despair: Problems

Score

This essay deserves score between 8 to 8.5

Task Response:

The essay satisfies the task of finding the causes and recommendations very well. It also ensures strong reasoning with corresponding examples.

Coherence and Cohesion:

The essay maintains the flow of ideas quite well by ensuring the logical order of time. Effective usage of linking words helps to transit well from one topic to another.

Lexical Resource:

Range of words is used very precisely without compromising meaning of the sentences. There are exactly 259 words which help the writer maintain precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy:

There is enough variety on range of structures used appropriately. None of the sentences seem awkward.

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Why must you brainstorm in AWA on GRE?

While writing an essay on GRE, many students face challenges in completing the essay in time. Even if they do manage to write it in time, the essays are not well-developed as there are some loose ends here and there. According to ETS, among all test-takers average essay writing score is about 4, which indicates that most of the students are able to analyse the issue but fail to develop sufficient connection among the points and examples. Moreover, there are minor grammatical errors. (For more details click here.) To avoid such mistakes thinking and planning is essential. When you have analysed the point and corresponding example, penning it down is easy, as you can concentrate on one task a time.

However, when we underline the importance of thinking or brainstorming before writing essays in classroom course, many students (at least in India) are not very comfortable with the idea of spending some time on it.

Problems

Lack of time

In the essay writing task, you are asked to write about 350 words. However, ‘how many words are actually enough?’ is the question. If we consider the ideal essays by ETS in Official GRE guide, they are of on an average of 500 words. It can be easily deduced that in order to pen down an impressive essay which has sufficient reasoning and examples with fine control over language, one needs to write about 500 words. So, the problem is, are 30 minutes enough to write 500 words?

Trial and error

While attempting their first essay students start writing the essay right from the first whistle, that is, without brainstorming they start typing. Chances are they are not able to finish the writing task within given time and may well fear the tall demands of the task. With trial and error they may acquire few skills but may not be able to reach their full potential.

Multi-tasking

While attempting the essay without contemplation, all points are not available at hand at the beginning. As students start writing, a flow of thought begins and they may get points which are relevant but should have been placed before already written point or they may think of a suitable example after a few minutes. Now, after realising what corrections are beneficial, students are tempted to edit, adding an extra task to already two. This multi-tasking consumes extra time.

Reasons for brainstorming

Reason 1

Many argue that they may not have sufficient time to write the essay as they don’t have enough time in current conditions where they start writing from first minute. It is very well established that average typing speed in the world is about 40 words per minute. Technically, if you are aware of what to write you should be able to write 400 words in 10 minutes. Let’s cut a slack of 50%, still students can write 400 words in 20 minutes. Therefore, to write about 500 words students can dedicate 24 minutes with 50% slower typing compared to world average.

Reason 2

Multi-tasking stresses mind and in fact, students end up committing more mistakes than they would have committed otherwise. The best reply your mind gives to such stress is that it switches itself off. Just to illustrate it further read following situations and see if you can correlate with any one of it.

If you are college student and if you have already written a GRE essay in 30 minutes, you may have observed many grammatical errors after completing the essay. You may have not noticed them while writing, but afterwards when the stress was relieved.

If you have been working already, it is easy to correlate the switching off the brain with a situation when you wrote your first official mail. Despite extraneous efforts, you might have found out the that you could have avoided many silly mistakes.

Therefore, it follows that if you can think about the points and corresponding examples to be presented on the essay within 5 minutes and then write an essay, chances are your essays would have right flow of the reasoning alongside relevant illustrations. While typing you can ignore extra points that may distract you from the task at hand.

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