Many professionals from India appear for IELTS – General Training each year in order to apply for permanent residency in Canada and Australia. One of the main challenges these professional face is IELTS writing section which consists of two tasks. Task 1 is Letter Writing and Task 2 is Essay Writing. We have already published few samples of writing task 2.
Task of essay writing expects you to write an essay in minimum 250 words. Reader judges your essay on factors such as Task Response, Coherence and Cohesion, Lexical Resources, and Grammatical Range and Accuracy. Here, we have decided to publish samples by our students which can guide students preparing for IELTS online.
Advances in technology and automation have reduced the need for manual labour. (opinion) Therefore, working hours should be reduced.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Automation is pervasive across all industries and has reduced human efforts. At the same time, it has given birth to many phenomena ranging from industrialization to globalization, keeping people discussing whether to decrease the number of working hours or not. It seems that the number of working hours must be kept similar.
Let’s consider manufacturing industry. Indeed, the automation has reduced the human labours drastically but also has reduced number of labourers instead of working hours. At the same time, the globalization and revolution in transportation have increased the consumer demands of goods many-folds. To manufacture for such soaring demands, the fired workers work in other industries which help bridge the gap between demand and supply, in turn, creating new jobs. These task forces put in 24 hours a day which in fact demands more number of working hours.
On the other hand, one can argue that in Information Technology (IT) sector, automated programs assist the personnel by reducing number of hours required to complete the tasks. Additionally, better hardware makes it easy to have sophisticated programs which can reduce the need to work extensively. However, increasing productivity standards demand constant improvement in such codes and hardware. Improving these both aspects requires additional working hours ultimately beating the goal why they were there in first place.
Looking back, in traditional industries like manufacturing as well as non-traditional industries like IT, increasing demands of customers, productivity standards, and subsequent improvisations make it difficult to even maintain same number of working hours forget reducing them. So, I believe the number of working hours should be constant.
This essay deserves a score of about 7.5.
The essay satisfies the task of explaining both sides of the essay very well. It also ensures strong reasoning with corresponding examples.
Coherence and Cohesion:
The essay maintains the flow of ideas quite well by ensuring logical order. Effective usage of linking words helps to transmit well from one topic to another, though there is hiccup while giving examples.
The range of words used is very precise without compromising the meaning of the sentences. There are exactly 268 words which help the writer maintain precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy:
There is enough range of structures which are used appropriately.
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