Many professionals from India appear for IELTS – General Training each year in order to apply for permanent residency in Canada and Australia. One of the main challenges these professional face is IELTS writing section which consists of two tasks. Task 1 is Letter Writing and Task 2 is Essay Writing. We have already published few samples of writing task 2.
The task of essay writing expects you to write an essay in minimum 250 words. Reader judges your essay on factors such as Task Response, Coherence and Cohesion, Lexical Resources, and Grammatical Range and Accuracy. Here, we have decided to publish samples by our students which can guide students preparing for IELTS online.
In many countries, today insufficient respect is shown to older people.
What do you think may be the reasons for this?
What problems might this cause in society?
In this fast-paced world, local traditions are first causalities of globalization. While people are busy celebrating the materialistic achievements, very few are concerned about the old generation, forget acknowledging their parent’s due contribution in the success. This is an attempt to account for the reasons of the trends and their repercussions in the future.
Let’s begin with causes of the trend. Due to change in priorities youngsters value their careers to the extent of sacrificing their family time. Lack of attention makes veterans feel unwanted. To reconcile the relations, they may ask off-springs few questions which are labelled by the youth as an intrusion in their lives, leading to disrespect. Moreover, rarely do we see senior members fit enough to care for themselves. Their physical, as well as monetary dependence, is abhorred, leading to further disregard. For example, many youngsters leave their countries, never to return to their parents and family lest they may depend on youth’s new-found treasure.
If this continues further, one can foresee a bleak future for the humanity. Firstly, lack of respect for the seniors of a house leads to dysfunctional families as youngsters opt for nuclear families at drop of a hat. Secondly, parents who are technologically and monetarily dependent on their children are considered as a liability and dispatched to old-age homes which have sprung up like mushrooms all over the country. The trends estrange the families jolting the foundations of family systems.
Looking back, it clear that changes in priorities and moral grounds of the current generation are main reasons for such an apathy towards elderly. If this continues to happen they institution of families itself will be challenged in the future.
This essay deserves a score of about 8.
The essay satisfies the task of explaining the causes and effects very well. It also ensures strong reasoning with corresponding examples.
Coherence and Cohesion:
The essay maintains the flow of ideas quite well by ensuring logical order. Effective usage of linking words helps to transmit well from one topic to another, though there is hiccup while giving examples.
The range of words used is very precise without compromising the meaning of the sentences. There are exactly 278 words which help the writer maintain precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy:
There is enough range of structures which are used appropriately.
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